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'Lo Amelia, It certainly does present in a more than poetic way. ^_^ Of course, poetic prose is lovely. But I think a certain poetic abstraction (license, perhaps ^_^') has ...

GUTTERSNIPE Really, one day, I promise to post. I swear. For realsies, you say. Yes, for realsies. I have been writing more longhand which is good. Real good. Fencing! ...That ...

Card games. Er, hey - easy to win if you're sharp, right? -Tov Neither. -Piers --- "Fake it 'til you make it." True?

Get wet. Er...what? expecting - ' jump in puddles '? -Tov The same bloody thing I'd do on a dry day. -Piers --- What's whimsy to you?

Moved to Fantasy Fiction . (As you've now got prologue and chapters up, Hermes, it belongs in the Lit. Forums. If you ever need a critique, feel free to PM ...

Hey Jarannis. ^_^ Welcome to YWS! ...I'll have to admit, you're the first I've seen to pose an introduction via quiz. But it's a neat way getting a point across. ...

...been drinking something other than water? Sure. Always meet people with a moral. Er, Hell. A what? -Tov My moral? Bloody hell, like a story and you get to the ...

Sleep late. Right? Sleep really late if you get caught. -Tov --- Weakness is what?

'Lo Magic. ^_^ I rather like the straight third-person narrative, limited crisply to Polly. It gives the atmosphere a deceptively comfortable commonplace nature, But in keeping near to Polly, you've ...

Rather mad in its advertisment jingle kind of cadence - to put it in a musical sense. My first thought was that the end was weak. Such a bloody serious ...

Oh, me likes the indents :D [I think "played" and "punished" are in the same tense as "captured" and "lived", as past participles, where they're not solid preterite tense, but ...

Ah, see what you mean, Amelia. ^_^ In fact, it's lovely that way. But I think, still, the punctuation doesn't quite imply the switch-up. I wonder if staggering the lines ...

The endless invention, Sam - inventive would be the adjective to you. ^_^ There's something in your stories that brings to mind gears neatly set together; greased; puzzle-pieced. Layered, perhaps, ...

I love the image, fleeting whimsy. To be a little tighter would be ideal. As for punctuation, I'm afraid it drops in like an anvil at points, and distracts more ...

Neat and vivid, as usual, dear Jig. There's something a little less acid about it in comparison to your other work; yet it fits into the character's calm and the ...